Review for: Notes on the Existance of Justin: The Complete First Season
reviewed by Jesse Candy


Date: 04-03-2009 03:59 pm
Score:

The story's fine. But, it reads like a first draft. There's a lot of repetition, and poor word choice. Rewriting for a better choice of nouns and verbs, and removing everything that didn't have to be there would make it sing. Just my thoughts. Hope this helps MW