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reviewed by steve drews
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Date: 06-22-2009 07:22 pm
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Overall, very well done. I like the visuals you created, especially in the apartment. Also, I was with the emotion of through most of it. I lost it a bit when the girlfriend admitted to cheating...it felt too easy to me. He should have had to fight harder to get it out of her, imo. I also agree with William that your POV changes were sometimes confusing. Other than that, nicely done!