Review for: the Dream of every Planet is to become a Sta
reviewed by Anton Jiracek
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Date: 12-01-2009 08:18 pm
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I see this piece as a very early draft. This piece needs a lot of work, and direction. Once you master that, it will be an excellent piece. Also, I noticed that the genre of this piece is under action. I would put under a romance. The poem also does a lot of explaining. Rather than explain, show and describe. Also, I would read up on some Poe and Shakespeare for some ideas on the verbiage needed for the piece.