Infected
by Bart Mann
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Review By: Marcus DeHart
Strong opening. I need more information about her to really understand why he's so haunted--something aside from having non-stop sex. If that's all they got going, it's no wonder she left him.
How does the title tie into the story? You talk about a haunted heart. Wouldn't Haunted be more appropriate?
Your last line, "Nothing was ever the same again after that" begs the question, what was it like before and how was it different. Flesh out the background. What was his life like aside from her? Flesh out the characters.
Overall, the narrative is good. Just need the characters to be less superficial.


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