Action -
the Dream of every Planet is to become a Sta
by jeRRy whaLLey
G




12 comments 549 views Tags:
Date Published: 02-28-2009




12 comments 549 views Tags:
Date Published: 02-28-2009
the Dream of every Planet is to become a Sta
by jeRRy whaLLey
Recent Reviews
Review By: Barry Thimble
I see this piece as a very early draft. This piece needs a lot of work, and direction. Once you master that, it will be an excellent piece. Also, I noticed that the genre of this piece is under action. I would put under a romance. The poem also does a lot of explaining. Rather than explain, show and describe. Also, I would read up on some Poe and Shakespeare for some ideas on the verbiage needed for the piece.
